Writing Tips I Keep On Hand

Nico (she/her)  
This list lives on my desktop and was curated from a wide range of sources. It’s aimed mainly toward those writing novels.

Note: None of these are my own original ideas. I credited where I could find the source. Some of it has been paraphrased, added to from additional sources, or modified from the original. 

Just in case you haven't gotten enough of my nonsense between the things you have to learn for yourself, a deep dive into editors, readers, and you, or all sorts of bad advice explained...

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⭐ Quick Guide to Punctuating Dialogue

  • “This is a line of dialogue,” she said.
  • “This,” he said, “is a sentence split by a speech tag.”
  • “This is a full sentence,” she said. “This is a new sentence.”
  • “This is a sentence followed by an action.” He smiled. “They’re separate sentences, because I didn’t speak by smiling.”
  • “Is this a question?” he asked.
  • “This sentence”—an action happens—“shows an action happening while someone is speaking.”
  • “This dialogue was interrupted by—”
  • “The ellipsis . . . It represents faltering speech or a long, meaningful pause.” <-print

Note: American English/CMOS

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⭐ Useful Dialogue Tags

Default to the unobtrusive said/asked. Not every line needs a tag. Good dialogue should speak for itself.

  • Volume: bellowed, crooned, hollered, mumbled, murmured, muttered, roared, screamed, screeched, shouted, squeaked, whispered, yelled
  • Emotion: begged, cried, choked out, exclaimed, groaned, growled, grumbled, gushed, hissed, moaned, mumbled, snarled, sneered, sobbed, wailed
  • Tone: admonished, announced, articulated, boasted, cooed, declared, demanded, encouraged, enunciated, heckled, huffed, lectured, jeered, joked, mimicked, quipped, scolded, snapped, taunted, teased, urged
  • Speed/Rhythm: drawled, droned, rambled, stammered, stuttered
  • Action: babbled, blubbered, blurted, called, chanted, commanded, coughed, croaked, gasped, hiccupped, interjected, lied, panted, rasped, recited, sang, slurred, sputtered, wheezed

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⭐ Basic Body Beats

  • Angry: clenching fists, gritting teeth, stomping
  • Cold: shivering, shaking, teeth chattering, rubbing hands together
  • Embarrassed: blushing/cheeks heat
  • Excited: clapping hands, jumping, smiling wide
  • Frustrated: rolling eyes, tapping foot, crossing arms
  • Nervous: fidgeting, lump in throat
  • Proud: chin held high, standing tall
  • Sad: head hanging, quiet voice, fighting back tears
  • Shocked: jaw dropped, hands covering mouth
  • Worried: mind racing, pacing, heart racing

Selection from The Emotion Thesaurus: A Writer's Guide to Character Expression

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⭐ Start a New Paragraph When…

  • The “camera” moves
  • A new character shows up
  • Someone speaks
  • Someone else speaks
  • A new idea, subjects, or topic is introduced
  • Time passes or reverts to an earlier point
  • The setting changes
  • The mood shifts
  • You want to create a dramatic effect

Source

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⭐ Showing vs. Telling

Do a Ctrl+f for “was” and reduce the number by rephrasing those sentences to have more active, dynamic verbs with more robust descriptions. (Also look for: am, is, are, to be, being, feel, felt) 

Checklist of RED FLAG WORDS for easy manuscript review.

  • Self-aware: knew, realized, felt, thought. Not every instance will be a problem, but it’s a good place to start the search.
  • Stimulus/response: when, as, before. Revise as needed so the stimulus comes first, then the character reaction.
  • Telling: when, as, to [verb], which, because, to be verbs. These are often found in told prose.
  • Stage direction: as, while, when. These often connect multiple actions in one long and confusing chain. 
  • Motivational: to [action], when, as, while, causing, making, because.
  • Emotional: in [emotion], with [feeling].
  • Descriptive: realize, could see, the sound of, the feel of, the smell of, tried to, trying, in order to, to make.
  • Passive: to be verbs—is, am, are, was, were, be, have, had, has, do, does, did, has been, have been, had been, will be, will have been, being.
  • Mental: realized, thought, wondered, hoped, considered, prayed.
  • Bonus often-unnecessary words: up, down, then

Main source/paraphrased from Understanding Show, Don't Tell (And Really Getting It) by Janice Hardy

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⭐ Character Motivations

  • Basic: curiosity, desire, failure, guilt, instability, peer pressure, survival
  • Noble: honor, inequality, love, loyalty, obedience, unfulfillment, vengeance
  • Evil: dishonor, greed, hatred, jealousy, lust, pride, revenge
  • Fear: death, humiliation, loss, pain, regret, rejection, shame

Source

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⭐ Possible Reasons a Plot Feels Flat

If your plot feels flat, STUDY it. Your story may be lacking…

  • Stakes: What would happen if the protagonist failed? Can you make it worse?
  • Thematic relevance: Do the events of the story speak to a greater emotional or moral message? Is the conflict resolved in a way that befits the theme?
  • Urgency: How much time does the protagonist have to complete their goal? Are there multiple factors complicating the situation?
  • Drive - What motivates the protagonist? Are they active or passive? Could you swap them for another character with zero impact?
  • Yield - Do their choices have impact? Do they use knowledge/clues from the beginning to help them in the end?

Source

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⭐ Possible Reasons a Scene Feels Flat

  • Excessive focus on one character
  • Surrounding characters are too passive (do they all have to be there?)
  • Lacking descriptions or markers for setting/time
  • Too much dialogue or exposition
  • Lacking atmosphere, motivation/goals, or tension
  • Include all senses — sight, hearing, touch, smell, taste

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⭐ Scene not working?

  • Change the weather.
  • Switch the POV.
  • Main character acts instead of reacts (example: goes for the kiss instead of getting kissed).
  • Other characters are suspicious/uncooperative instead of kind/helpful (or vide versa).
  • Start scene later in story timeline, with the missing time covered by a brief summation.
  • Start scene slightly earlier in the timeline, without the summary.
  • Introduce a new complication.
  • List the MC’s greatest fears—and make them happen.
  • Make the MC’s choices harder/raise the stakes.
  • Rewrite the scene from memory, keeping only the parts you like.
  • Delete the last line you wrote. Go in a different direction.

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⭐ How to Kick a Reader in the Gut

The bigger the issue, the smaller you write. Remember that. You don’t write about the horrors of war. No. You write about a kid’s burnt socks lying on the road. You pick the smallest manageable part of the big thing, and you work off the resonance. —Richard Price

Disrupt a reader's sense of justice. This generally means setting up a character to deserve one thing and then giving them the exact opposite.

  • Kill a character off before they can achieve their goal.
  • Let the bad guy get an extremely important win.
  • Set up a coup against a tyrannical king. The coup fails miserably.

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⭐ Wheel of Emotions

Source



Feel free to add more tips or advice you’ve found useful in the comments.



14 Comments

Nicolaysen

Kind reminder: Nothing about writing is one-size-fits-all; and you can always, ALWAYS take what you want and leave behind the rest. :heart:

:dragon:

I consider this post in-tandem with my last post, Bad Advice Explained, and Other Nonsense, which does a deep dive into the following:

  • What “show, don’t tell” means
  • Summarizing vs Expanding the Scene
  • Talking heads, and how to avoid
  • Body beats, dialogue tags, and adverbs
  • Reducing instances of “was”
  • And other random snippets of nonsense meant to help your writing shine :sparkling_heart:

For those new to Critique Circle, I posted a list of things I wish I had known when I started using the site (that I probably wouldn’t have listened to anyway had someone told them to me, because I’m an awful listener and have to learn for myself).

I also posted a deep dive into Editors, Readers, and You that is especially helpful for those looking to publish novels.

:dragon:

Edit to add:
Your blurb/query letter must answer:

  1. Who is the protagonist
  2. What do they want
  3. What are they willing to do to get it
  4. What is standing in their way
  5. What happens if they fail

Source: Gina Denny

Jul-22 at 00:04

Electric

Dang! I will defs be using this as a reference in the future! Thank you so much!

Jul-22 at 00:21

Andread

  • Set up a coup against a tyrannical king. The coup fails miserably.

hahaha represent!

Jul-22 at 00:38

Nicolaysen

EXCUSE ME I CANNOT WAIT TO SEE MY GIRL KAT TAKE OVER :rofl: :sparkling_heart: She better NOT fail or there WILL be a riot!! :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:

Jul-22 at 00:51

Jcgreen

  • “This sentence”—an action happens—“shows an action happening while someone is speaking.”

I used to do it that way. Then I had a professional reviewer tell me to put the dashes inside the quotes:

  • “This sentence—" an action happens "—shows an action happening while someone is speaking.”

I don’t suppose it really matters providing you are consistent. However, I notice you reference Chicago. Is that what they definitively suggest?

Do a Ctrl+f for “was” and reduce the number by rephrasing those sentences to have more active, dynamic verbs with more robust descriptions. (Also look for: am, is, are, to be, being, feel, felt)

Maybe, but I’d have the the proviso that not all instances should be cut. Not all instances are examples of passive verbs.

Jul-22 at 07:58

Leyos

All of these will now just be on tab while I’m writing, thanks!

Jul-22 at 08:03

Wendyg

Great tips, and as you say ‘no one size fits all’ so people should pick and choose.

For newbies reading it (those who haven’t read the epic Show vs Tell sagas on the forums yet), here’s a link to why writers need to Show AND Tell during a novel.
This Itch of Writing
Scroll down to this section:

Jul-22 at 08:13

Jacksavage

This is a personal rule, you wont find it in any how to write books. Never stray to far from the holy trinity; Character action, description, character internals.

Description should come from character perception and be present within the action, btw. But I try to never stray more than a few sentences from any of these three, unless it is a pure action scene like a fight. There are other exceptions to this, like the post fight fallout, where the narrative swings heavy towards character’s thoughts feelings about what happened and where they must go from here.

My second thing I always have in mind you also wont find in any how to write books. The reader is a voyeur. What do voyeurs want? The nitty gritty, juicy, backstabbing, warts and all, salacious gossip. Give 'em what they want.

The third thing wont even be found in the English language yet. You know what mansplaining is. I am talking about authorsplaining. Never treat the reader like they are idiots. Many are, but don’t treat them as such.

Jul-22 at 10:57

Jacksavage

That is an excellent site, Wendyg. Everything laid out nice and easy to follow. Muchos muchos gracias.

Jul-22 at 11:00

Nicolaysen

My copyeditor helped me out with this. But to your point, as long as you are consistent, it doesn’t necessarily matter. When you work with a copyeditor, you can tell them “I broke the style guide intentionally here, here, and here” before they start, and they note it on their style sheet for the project and then they make sure it’s broken consistently. Last time, I had a thorough list of things, much to no one’s surprise. :wink: Also, sometimes the style guide changes. I believe it was just updated this year. :thinking:

And I agree on “was”—as opined on at length in my last blog Bad Advice Explained, and Other Nonsense :rofl:

Jul-22 at 12:26

Ellearre

This whole thing is really helpful for writers. Thanks for sharing!

Jul-23 at 21:11

Kamagre

Thanks for all of these posts, Nico. :star::star::star: All are very helpful, including the references.

Jul-24 at 16:48

Risu

Love the tips and how they’re laid out so accessibly. You are a gem, Nico.

Other resources I find helpful: John D. Brown’s Key Conditions for Suspense and Jim Butcher’s Live Journal. I tend to revisit these whenever I start struggling.

Jul-25 at 14:49

Nicolaysen

:heart_eyes: :sparkling_heart:

Jul-25 at 17:03
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